Sunday, August 6, 2017
3:03 pm cdt
The most recent draft of Old Wounds is done. I have been working on this novel for several years, because I can't
decide what to do with it, which is probably a sign right there.
My main issue is that I think there is good stuff in
it, but I'm not certain how much of it is good and how much not.
This is why I have had such a problem over the last
several years of writing this thing. I can't decide if I want to write a full-length novel, or cut it back and make a novella
of it. I change my mind frequently, sometimes weekly, sometimes more often than that.
I think I may be too close to
it to decide. So, I am going to let the book sit for at least a month, possibly more, then give it a light going over, just
to get to the 50000 word mark, as I am currently just shy of 49400, and then I am going to find some beta-readers, who will
have their work cut out for them.
In the meantime, I am thinking about a thriller idea I had some time ago called, tentatively,
The Pursuit of Kelly Clark. I may dust this idea off and finish the outline, then write it.
Of course, this
will probably all change next week.
Thursday, July 20, 2017
She caught sight of herself in a (suspiciously convenient) mirror . . .
11:36 am cdt
Today, I want to write about what I consider one of the biggest cliches in fiction: the heroine (or possibly hero,but I'm
going to use one pronoun for the sake of consistency) catches sight of herself in a mirror, revealing her white-blonde hair,
delft-blue eyes, and large chest.
The average home does not have so many mirrors that the heroine should
be accidentally seeing herself in one. She might have one in her bedroom, and almost certainly has one in her bathroom, but
that should be it. Where are these mirrors she's catching sight of herself in?
And a place of business should have even
fewer mirrors. Some bars have them, some stores, maybe locker rooms and public bathrooms. But, frankly, there just aren't
that many opportunities to catch sight of yourself in a mirror as you go about your daily life, especially by accident, as
the commonly used phrasing of this cliche suggests.
Yes, I get it: the writer wants us to know what his heroine
looks like, and knows that it is rather awkward to interrupt the action and just shoehorn a description in, especially in
a first-person manuscript, where the heroine simply wouldn't talk about herself that way.
So, the writer falls back
on the cliche of the heroine just catching sight of herself in a conveniently placed mirror.
Your heroine can stay away
from mirrors. There are ways to deal with this issue of describing a character's looks without relying on the mirror cliche.
she can deliberately seek out the mirror, and spend some time primping and preening, admiring her eyes, hair, and figure.
This works if you want to portray her as vain, even narcisisstic, about her looks, but might not otherwise.
way to describe her is by writing a plot-relevant scene in which the heroine describes herself to someone else. For example,
suppose our heroine is a private investigator, who is trying to meet a witness so she can interview him and find out what
he knows about her case. She might be trying to arrange to meet him at a bar or a restaurant. He wants to know who to look
for. She could reply, "I'm five-seven. I have white-blonde hair, blue eyes, and, um, rather a curvy figure."
way to describe your heroine is to break her description up throughout the manuscript and make it related to the character's
For example: She put on her favorite blouse and best suit, thinking as she did about how hard it was to find
clothes that fit her big breasts and hour-glass hips without modification. She'd learned at an early age how to sew and tailor
her clothes to make them fit her figure. She just wished she didn't have to do the same thing every time she bought a blouse.
Then, later in the book, you might write: She put a hat on. She had to wear a hat more or less everywhere she went.
Her white-blonde hair could be a problem, as it was rather easily noticeable. Her blue eyes weren't such a problem, but her
hair was so distinctive that she'd given thought to dying it dark brown no more than one occasion.
Another way to get
the description into the story, one that would work especially well in first-person, but is still good in third-person,
would be to have another character describe your heroine.
For example, she meets a witness, who is a young man. He mgiht
smile or leer and say, "Do all private detectives have such wonderful hair and eyes, and such beautiful boobs?"
the heroine can tell the reader that she has blue eyes and white-blond hair and an ample chest without the information seeming
to come from out of nowhere. This also has the advantage of helping to establish some of the character traits of the witness.
Or, you could simply not worry about describing your heroine. The reader will provide his own mental image of her as
he goes, and might even be put out if your description does not agree with his.
One caveat is to not wait too long to
describe your characters, especially the main characters. I once read more than 100 pages of a horror novel before learning
that one of the main characters was a blonde. I had been imagining a brunette, and now, suddenly, I had to change my mental
image of the character. If your heroine is blonde, whether my white-blonde example or a more common strawberry blonde,
or if she is a redhead, tell us sooner rather than later. Just don't do it in an unnatural way.
There you have it: ways
to describe your character without having to rely on one of the biggest cliches there is.
Sunday, April 16, 2017
Seeing it through your eyes ... or mine ... or his and hers
3:56 pm cdt
I thought I'd say a few words about point of view.
One of the most important decisions a writer can make is deciding
what point of view to tell a story in. As a quick reminder, there are three widely recognized points of view. They are:
person -- I did this
Second Person -- You did this
Third person -- He or she did this
I will repeat what
I said earlier: one of the most important decisions a writer can make is the selection of the proper point of view for a story.
writers are very good at first person. Lawrence Block, for example, has written a great many novels in first person, and I
am happy to read any one of them.
Sometimes, the decision will be made for you. Private eye fiction, for example, is
predominantly, alhtough not exclusively, written in first person. A sprawling, multi-generational story will almost certainly
require third person.iha
I have told stories from both first and third person points of view. Taylor Made,
False Witness, and The Body of the Crime, are all first person. Jane Doe, Striking Out,
Dad's Legacy, Homecoming, and Trophies are all third person. Jane Doe and Striking Out are from
mulitple points view, the others are from a more limited point of view, that of one character.
And sometimes a story
won't work in a certain point of view. For example, I have read several first-person stories in which the protagonist is killed
at the end of the story, or, more accurately, is in a situation in which death is inevitable. I personally don't think this
works. First person implies that the hero of the story survived and is telling you about something that happened to them some
time ago, some days or weeks or months or years in the past.
So, when I read a first person story where the hero/heroine
dies, I think, "How are you telling me this when you are dead?"
I say this because of my own experiences
writing Designated Angel. The earliest version of the story was in third person, and I thought it went nowhere. I
simply didn't like what I had.
Then one day, I thought, why not change to first person? So I did, rewriting
the entire manuscript that I had from the point of view of my hero. I could do this because I didn't feel the need to tell
the story from any other point of view. That, and the decision to combine two stories into one, allowed me to come up with
a story I am happy with.
So, what is the takeway? If you are not satisfied with a story, one of the ways you can attempt
to salvage it is to at least consider changing yourpoint of view.
Sunday, April 2, 2017
Two into one
2:54 pm cdt
I recently finished the first draft of a new story, Designated Angel. I like this story enough that I will more
than likely try to submit this story to one or more of the major magazines before I think about independent publication. I
would like to see this story get wider circulation, and it would help me to build my following if I have publication in a
major mystery magazine in my resume.
The process of writing Designated Angel also allows me to talk about an
aspect of writing that played an important part in getting this story finished, and that is the willingness and ability to
combine two stories into one.
Designated Angel started out as an outline for a story called Guardian Angel.
I put a little work in on the story, but didn't do much with it becasue it simply didn't work. According to the outline, a
character had to commit a nasty deed, but there as absolutely no reason for her to do so, except possibly misogyny. So I put
the story aside after writing only a few pages.
In my notes, I had a story idea in which a cop helps a former Marine
to get even with the man who killed someone close to him. The law couldn't touch this killer, and the cop and the Marine both
knew it, so the cop gives the Marine the information he would need to take care of the perp himself.
The problem with
this story is that it wasn't really a complete story, just an idea for an incident. I read it over, realized this, then thought,
"It would make a good ending for Guardian Angel, if I change the actions of one main female character.
did so. I outlined the combined story, using the original story as the basis for most of the new verison, changing the actions
of the one character -- which, among other things, made a great deal more sense -- and using the second idea as the ending.
This gave me a complete story that is better than the original story, and uses an idea that I would never have written otherwise.
The rest was relatively easy. I knew where I wanted the story to go, and all I had to do was write it. Now, the first
draft is finished and I'm going to let it sit for a few days while I work on other things.
The lesson from this, I think
is, even if a story idea of yours isn't workable, don't be afraid to combine it with other ideas and stories, and make whatever
changes are necessary. The result might be something good.
Saturday, March 18, 2017
1:01 pm cdt
So much for my resolve to post more often. I knew I had gone a while without posting, but I didn't realize I had gone this
I am still working on Old Wounds, and a short story, the original Guardian Angel, now re-titled
Designated Angel. I am also doing the test scoring gig that I have done each of the last several summers. I am trying
to fit my writing work in and around that schedule. I am also still investigating the possibility of creating a Patreon page.
it has been difficult to find the motivation to get much done. My mother, who seemed to be in good health, died suddenly almost
a month ago at age 86, and I am still adjusting to the realities of her being gone.
Among other things, I have to keep
an eye on my father, widowed at 87 after more than 59 years of marriage, and I have new responsibilities around the house.
sum it all up: I am trying to keep writing, but it is slow going.